Скачать или смотреть Final Video: Kidney failure in the cat

This video is created during internship. I will record my comments here for the benefit of other interns in video production.

My comments are:
1. An excellent concise video for pet owners as the content is in depth.
2. Good narration and pacing
3. Visuals are great
4. It conforms to the 3D's structure in a drama form for sales of services/products:
4.1 Details
4.2 Dialogue
4.3 Discovery

IMPROVEMENTS
1. Title should interest prospective viewers. E.g. A bad-breath vomiting old cat.
2. Presenting signs: Polydipsia and polyuria. Not explained in layman's terms.
3. X-rays should be presented separately in a video and take time to explain, not just flashed by. Similarly with image of tongue ulcers, blood test reports.
4. FONTS used are NOT good. See what the professional news channel and documentaries what fonts they use for their subtitles. They are easily to read.
5. Blood test results could be typed out as a table, to clarify. In this case, the result of creatinine is missing.
6. Conclusion.
What are tips and advices for the reader? Wellness checks, therapeutic diet and monitoring?
Other than credits, should have "For More Information....contact......".

HOOK
There should have been a hook. All interesting movies and documentaries have hooks. The intern has to think of the hook himself or herself. In this case, the hook could be "tongue ulcers". After all, people do get tongue ulcers too. Why? What are causes in people? In this cat? Research on causes of tongue ulcers in cats and people......With this type of hook, I will like to view the video esp. if I am a cat owner and I suffer from tongue ulcers!

It follows that this video ought to have tongue ulcers as the first frame, not just a slide of the title.

Many interns just cannot think of a hook. This may be the result of our Singapore educational system which does not (I may be wrong) have much video making projects for the students.