From Band 6.5 to 8: IELTS Writing Makeover

Watch as we help Isha improve her IELTS Writing Task 2 score from Band 6.5 to Band 8 with simple changes.

In this interactive lesson, you'll see each step of her writing makeover and choose what happens next.

It's an easy and enjoyable way to improve your writing skills too.
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IMPORTANT- The essay below is not her final Band 8.0 essay. You must watch the whole video to understand what the essay below is and how to use it to improve it to an 8.0.

👇 FULL ESSAY:

Many toddlers use phones for an extended period of time on a daily basis. This is because parents nowadays want to keep their toddlers entertained, and this could be a positive thing because toddlers can use it to access educational apps.

Parents use phones to entertain their toddlers. This is because parents can’t find the time to finish their tasks because they are consumed with looking after their toddlers. That is why they give them mobile phones to keep them occupied so that they can finish whatever it is that they need to do, without being distracted by their child. Many parents need to cook meals for their families which requires time and attention, and that is why they give phones to their toddlers to keep them occupied so they can finish up without interruptions or distractions.

There are a lot of learning opportunities on the internet that can help toddlers cognitive development. This can be positive because, while the child is occupied, he or she is also learning something that interests them and helps in their development, for example they can access to educational apps which have lessons and topics directed towards toddlers learning and toddlers can use this to learn objects or colors or different types of foods and much more, hence the time they are looking at the phone is not wasted.

In conclusion, parents nowadays prefer giving mobile phones to their child to keep them occupied, and it can be a good thing because it can also help the child’s development positively through learning and educating themselves.

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